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Proofing the Proof

There is more to proofing a book than just reading the story.

By: Darby Karchut

At some point in every writer’s career, you’ll be asked to proof a final version of your work.
Sure, you’ll have various editors doing this, but you’ll need to be a part of it, too. After all, it’s YOUR name on the cover and you want it to be as perfect as possible.

Even at the manuscript stage, submitting a well-polished story will help your work stand out. It shows agents and editors that you are industry-savvy.

There is more to proofing a book, however, than just reading the story (aka body matter). It means examining literally every centimeter of the product. During this process, I get down to some serious detailing, checking for any and all mistakes, and taking copious notes—old school style.

Over the years, I’ve developed a checklist to make sure I don’t miss anything. I break the task into sections, moving from easy to more difficult; mostly to warm up and to feel like I’ve accomplished something. Remember, for each item on this list, we’re looking for spelling, grammar, punctuation, correct vocabulary, correct numbering and sequence, etc. Read stuff aloud—it helps like nothing else to catch mistakes.

Cover

  • Front
  • Spine (place your book on its back. The words on the spine should read left to right)
  • Back (correct jacket copy, ISBN number, publisher’s contact info, etc.)

Front Matter

  • Praise Page
  • Title Page (called the recto side)
  • Copyright Page (called the verso side)
  • Dedication
  • Acknowledgements (unless this is at the end, then skip for now)
  • Table of Contents (if applicable)
  • Foreword (if applicable)
  • Preface or Introduction (if applicable)

End Matter

  • Acknowledgements (here’s where you want to triple check that you’ve spelled your publisher, agent, editors, publicists, and cover artist names correctly, as well as everyone else you want to thank)
  • Discussion Questions
  • Author Interview or Q & A
  • Author’s Bio (triple check that your contact info is correct)

Chapters and Pages

  • Check each chapter title for sequential numbering. Trust me on this.
  • Check each page for sequential numbering. Trust me more.
  • Orphans and Widows. Tedious, but it must be done.

Body Matter

  • Read your story aloud. This is single most productive use of your time at this stage. As I mentioned earlier, you’ll catch dropped words, repetitive vocabulary, and grammar mistakes like crazy.
  • Proper nouns (characters, locations, etc). Keep a cheat sheet nearby.
  • Foreign languages. Triple-check spelling and punctuation. Then, check them once more. Get this right.
  • Paragraphs. Make sure the breaks are correct.

This sounds so easy and straightforward, but you and I both know this is blood-letting time. Re-reading a manuscript you’ve labored over for months or years can be downright nauseating. I don’t know about you, but I spend a lot of time cringing, too.

But.

But.

But, I often find myself enthralled with the story, and a bit in awe of some writing I didn’t remember producing. Which is pretty cool. It is really okay, you know, to feel pride and satisfaction in your creation. If we writers (or painters or musicians or dancers) do not cherish our work, then our readers or viewers won’t either. So, proof away and be prepared to fall in love again.


Darby Karchut

Darby Karchut is an award-winning author, dreamer, and compulsive dawn greeter. A proud native of New Mexico, she now lives in the foothills of the Rocky Mountains, where she runs in blizzards and bikes in lightning storms. When not dodging death by Colorado, Darby is busy wrangling words. Her latest book (lucky number thirteen), DEL TORO MOON, released October 2018 from Owl Hollow Press. Visit the author at her website.

Sweet Success for Jasmine Tritten

By: Darby Karchut

Congratulations to Jasmine Tritten on winning an Honorable Mention for a book Designed by Entrant (ON THE NILE WITH A DANCING DANE, August 2020) from The National Federation of Press Women (NFPW) in their 2021 Professional Communications Contest. She was also awarded a second Honorable Mention for a Single Photograph, General Photos (Four Bobcat Kittens).

On the Nile with Dancing Dane

ABOUT THE BOOK: 

“Underneath the black and gold glittery outfit, danced a blonde, blue-eyed Danish Viking woman with a Middle-Eastern soul.”

 An adventurous travel memoir by award-winning author Jasmine Tritten, exploring the land of the pharaohs, overcoming challenges and obstacles while following her love for dance and the Egyptian culture. Filled with mystery and surprises. Original artwork and photos by the author. Copies may be purchased through Amazon .

Jasmine Tritten

ABOUT THE AUTHOR:  

Jasmine Tritten is an award-winning author born in Denmark. In 1964 she immigrated to the U.S.A. The last five years she’s written numerous short stories published in various anthologies. Her 2015 memoir, The Journey of an Adventuresome Dane, won an award. A children’s story, Kato’s Grand Adventure, published in 2018 and co-authored with her husband, won five awards. During the 2020 pandemic, Jasmine wrote and self-published a travel book On the Nile with a Dancing Dane, winner of three awards in 2021. Jasmine resides in enchanting Corrales, New Mexico with her husband and four cats. Follow the author on Facebook.


Darby Karchut

Sweet Success is coordinated by Darby Karchut who is an award-winning author, dreamer, and compulsive dawn greeter. A proud native of New Mexico, she now lives in the foothills of the Rocky Mountains, where she runs in blizzards and bikes in lightning storms. Visit her website for information on her publications. Click here to submit your Sweet Success Story.

Beware the “ING” Construction

Time Warps. Misplaced Modifiers.

By; Terry Odell

You don’t have to read science fiction to run into a time warp. At the very first writer’s conference I attended, an agent said she would reject a query with more than 1 sentence beginning with the “ing” construction. Her explanation—it’s too easy to make mistakes with that sentence structure.

But is it wrong? No. You have to be careful, and you have to pay attention. There are different reasons to avoid, or minimize use of those pesky “ing” words.

The Time Warp

First, I’ll talk about the inadvertent time warp, which I’ve been seeing a lot of in recent reads.

What’s wrong with these sentences?

“Running across the clearing, John rushed into the tent.”
“Opening the door, Mary tripped down the stairs.”

Using that kind of “ing” construction means the actions have to take place simultaneously. But is that possible in the above examples? No.

John can’t be getting into the tent while he’s running across the clearing. And Mary needs to open the door before she goes downstairs.

Don’t Dangle Your Modifier

Next, the dangling modifier. In my first critique group, I held the prize for creating an answering machine that gave neck massages. I’d written, “Rubbing her neck, the blinking red light on the answering machine caught Sarah’s eye.” Ooops. (But I would like a machine with that function!)

Make sure the noun or pronoun comes immediately after the descriptive phrase. Thus, the above example could be “Rubbing her neck, Sarah noticed the blinking red light on the answering machine.”

If your “ing” verb follows “was”, take another look. “John was running across the clearing” isn’t a strong as “John ran across the clearing.”  Of course, you’ll want to use stronger verbs, such as raced, sped, or barreled, but the idea is the same.

When you’re looking over your manuscript, you might want to flag words ending in “ing” and take another look to be sure you haven’t made any of these basic errors.

How to Spot them in Word

In your document, click the dropdown arrow by “Find” then select “Advanced Find.”
Click “More” and then check the “Use Wildcard” Box. Type ing into the find field, then click the “Special” Option, and “End of Word.” This will add a > character. You can use the Reading Highlight to see all of them, and the “Find Next” to deal with them one at a time. You’ll get more than just verbs ending in ing, but it’s still a quick way to spot them. The hard part is determining whether you’ve got a problem


Terry Odell, Author

Although Terry Odell had no aspirations of becoming a writer until long after receiving her AARP card, she’s now the author of over thirty novels, novellas, and short stories. She writes mysteries and romantic suspense, but calls them all “Mysteries With Relationships.” Her awards include the Silver Falchion, the International Digital Awards, and the HOLT Medallion. A Los Angeles native, she moved to Florida where she spent thirty years in the heat and humidity. She now enjoys life with her husband and rescue dog in the cooler, dryer climate of the Colorado Rockies, where she watches wildlife from her windows.
Catch up with Terry on her WebsiteFacebookTwitterGoodreads, or Amazon.

Sweet Success for Randall Stewart

By: Darby Karchut

Congratulations to Randall Stewart. His recent release, HIKING IN CRIPPLE CREEK, VICTOR, AND GOLDFIELD WITH THE GOLD CAMP TRAIL MULES, was featured in the Pikes Peak Courier newspaper.

Hiking in Cripple Creek

ABOUT THE BOOK:

This hiking book discusses the geology of the Colorado Gold Camp, selected mines of the district, and highlights the many hiking trails around the Gold Camp. Copies may be purchased through Amazon.

Randall Stewart

ABOUT THE AUTHOR:

Randall Stewart lives in the Front Range of Colorado, and has written 11 books available on Amazon Books, including a recent book on hiking in the Gold Camp area of Cripple Creek, Victor, and Goldfield. His books are available as paperbacks and ebooks. Visit him at Randall Books and follow the author on Facebook.


Darby Karchut

Sweet Success is coordinated by Darby Karchut who is an award-winning author, dreamer, and compulsive dawn greeter. A proud native of New Mexico, she now lives in the foothills of the Rocky Mountains, where she runs in blizzards and bikes in lightning storms. Visit her website for information on her publications. Click here to submit your Sweet Success Story.

Those Lazy, Hazy Days of Summer

By Leeann Betts (excerpt from Nuggets of Writing Gold)

I keep promising myself that one of these years, I’m going to enjoy summer. Instead of spending the months of June, July, and August cooped up indoors writing and revising and researching, I’m going to spend the time in a mountain retreat, on the front veranda, surrounded by trees and a babbling brook. Writing and revising and researching.

So I guess the truth is, it isn’t the work that I resent as much as the being indoors. Seems such a waste of great weather not to be outside enjoying it. I don’t have any problems staying indoors in the winter. I am not a fan of cold and snow. But summer….

And then I heard those words from my agent, Terrie Wolf, that every writer longs to hear. “Take some time off. You’ve been working hard lately. You deserve a rest.”

My mind raced. Which mountain did I want to go to? Which tree would I sit beneath? Which babbling brook would sing to me, inspire me as my fingers flew across the keyboard?

Nothing came to mind.

Okay, maybe I don’t need a mountain. Maybe I need a cruise. Sitting on the deck, the sun warming me from the outside, my story plot heating up inside. Perfect.

Except I’m prone to seasickness.

Okay, how about a quaint bed and breakfast retreat in a sleepy little town. Where do I want to set my next book? Let’s go there.

I’m drawing a blank.

And then I realize my problem. It’s not that I don’t have any ideas of what to write next. I do. Dozens of ideas. It isn’t that I can’t choose a mountain or a town or a cruise — my problem is I like to write in my office in the basement. I have a peaceful moss green paint on the walls along with peaceful pictures of the outdoors.

I have a great desk and a comfy chair. I can have music on in the background, or not. I can stop and pop in a load of laundry or stir dinner in the crock pot. Or not.

And so, despite my agent’s advice, I’m going to stay home. And write. And outline. And research.

Sure, I’ll go out once in a while and see what I’m missing. Sunshine. Flowers. Heat.

I’ll take pictures and keep writing.

Maybe I’ll write a summer story. That way, I don’t miss anything.

Takeaway:
It’s not about where you write, but that you do write.

Exercises:

1. Make a writing date for yourself. In ink. On your calendar or schedule or whatever you use to keep track of things. Be reasonable. If you aren’t already in the habit of writing every day, schedule in every other day. If you work a full-time job, don’t commit to writing for three hours in the evening or all day Saturday. Instead, commit to spending twenty minutes at your computer with the email turned off.

2. If you struggle with finding time, make time. Get up twenty minutes earlier. Go to bed twenty minutes later. Don’t watch any television in the evening until you’ve spent your twenty minutes at the computer.

3. Pretend you have a deadline. Maybe not for a full book. Try setting a deadline for a chapter. Call a writing friend and tell him you commit to having a chapter written by _________. Tell your friend to hold you accountable. Then sit down and write.


Leeann Betts

Leeann Betts writes contemporary romantic suspense, while her real-life persona, Donna Schlachter, pens historical romantic suspense. Together she and Donna have published more than 30 novellas and full-length novels. They ghostwrite, judge writing contests, edit, facilitate a critique group, and are members of American Christian Fiction Writers, Writers on the Rock, Christian Authors Network, Pikes Peak Writers, and Sisters in Crime. Leeann travels extensively to research her stories, and is proud to be represented by Terrie Wolf of AKA Literary LLC. Follow her on , and her blog.

Sweet Success for Donna Schlachter

By: Darby Karchut

Congratulations to Donna Schlachter! Writing as Leeann Betts, she recently released her latest novella collection from Barbour Publishing, ALWAYS A WEDDING PLANNER, with co-authors RL Ashly, Toni Shiloh, and Davalynn Spencer. This sweet and clean romance collection features four best friends who operate a wedding planning business in Loveland, Colorado.

Always a Wedding Planner, by: Donna Schlachter

ABOUT THE BOOK: 

Discover how keeping secrets from each other threatens four women’s friendships, wedding business, and own ability to find love in Loveland, Colorado.

Business partners Felicity Anderson, the cake baker; Kiki Bell, the seamstress; Cassie Blackthorn, the coordinator; and Chef Saffron Delarosa are best of friends in a town that is a romantic wedding destination for many couples—who work together at Weddings by Design to make every bride’s special day perfect. Could each falling into their own romance be the key to working out their differences and learning to trust each other—and God—with their futures? Copies of the book may be purchased through Amazon and Barbour Publishing

ABOUT THE AUTHOR: 

Donna Schlachter

Donna Schlachter usually pens historical mysteries while her alter ego, Leeann, writes cozy mysteries. Together, they’ve penned more than 30 books and novellas. They also judge writing contests, teach online and at conferences, and offer writerly services such as editing and proofreading. They are members of various writers groups including Pikes Peak Writers, ACFW, Sisters in Crime, Writers on the Rock, and Capitol Christian Writers Federation. Visit Donna’s website and blog, and learn more about her fellow authors, Toni Shiloh, RL Ashly, and Davalynn Spencer.


Darby Karchut

Sweet Success is coordinated by Darby Karchut who is an award-winning author, dreamer, and compulsive dawn greeter. A proud native of New Mexico, she now lives in the foothills of the Rocky Mountains, where she runs in blizzards and bikes in lightning storms. Visit her website for information on her publications. Click here to submit your Sweet Success Story.

Another Sweet Success for Fleur Bradley

By: Darby Karchut

And the wonderful news just keeps on a-coming! Fleur Bradley is pleased to announce that her middle-grade mystery novel Midnight at the Barclay Hotel won the SCBWI Crystal Kite Award for the Southwest region. Her book is also nominated for the Anthony (mystery) Award in the YA category, the Agatha (mystery) Award in the Best Children’s/YA, and made Florida’s Sunshine State Young Readers nominee and Rhode Island Children’s Book Award nomination list.

Midnight at the Barclay Hotel

ABOUT THE BOOK:

When JJ Jacobson convinced his mom to accept a surprise invitation to an all-expenses-paid weekend getaway at the illustrious Barclay Hotel, he never imagined that he’d find himself in the midst of a murder mystery. He thought he was in for a run-of-the-mill weekend ghost hunting at the most haunted spot in town, but when he arrives at the Barclay Hotel and his mother is blamed for the hotel owner’s death, he realizes his weekend is going to be anything but ordinary.

Now, with the help of his new friends, Penny and Emma, JJ has to track down a killer, clear his mother’s name, and maybe even meet a ghost or two along the way.

Fleur Bradley

ABOUT THE AUTHOR: 

Fleur Bradley is passionate about two things: mysteries and getting kids to read, and she regularly speaks at librarian and educator conferences on reaching reluctant readers. Originally from the Netherlands, Fleur now lives in Colorado Springs with her family, and entirely too many rescue animals. For more information on Fleur and her books, visit her at ftbradley.com and follow her on Twitter.


Darby Karchut

Sweet Success is coordinated by Darby Karchut who is an award-winning author, dreamer, and compulsive dawn greeter. A proud native of New Mexico, she now lives in the foothills of the Rocky Mountains, where she runs in blizzards and bikes in lightning storms. Visit her website for information on her publications. Click here to submit your Sweet Success Story.

Who Wants to be the Indented Author?

By: John B. Roberts, II

Surf camp in Costa Rica is a funny place to realize you need a co-author. I was unsuccessfully trying to learn to stand up on a surfboard when my wife called to say an acquiring editor wanted to see an old book proposal. After passing on it years before, he’d changed jobs and thought it was right for his new publisher. But there was a catch. Two, actually. The original proposal covered the twenty years after the Dalai Lama’s exile from Tibet and a secret CIA program to support the Tibetan resistance against China. The editor wanted to dramatically enlarge the scope of the book and publish it to coincide with the fifty-year anniversary of the Dalai Lama’s exile. There was no way to meet this deadline without a co-author.

What to Look for in a Co-Author

A failed collaboration that ended with a $12 million lawsuit taught me what I didn’t want in a co-author. A judge dismissed that suit, but only after substantial legal fees. The project involved a principal author, his co-author, and me as a ghostwriter. Divisions of labor were ill-defined, the book bogged down, and the publisher cancelled the contract. To complete the Tibet book required a co-author with strong research and interviewing skills, the ability to conform his or her writing style to a common standard, and a track record of meeting deadlines.

My wife, Elizabeth, was the perfect candidate. We’d met working at The McLaughlin Group, a nationally-broadcast political show whose host was a demanding perfectionist. She later wrote for an authoritative publication, The Cook Political Report.  We’d already collaborated successfully on Best Bets, a Washington, D.C. visitor guide.

We approached the Tibet book like two professionals, creating a chapter-by-chapter outline, delineating assignments, determining who would be the lead (or sole) author for each chapter, setting deadlines, and holding frequent accountability sessions to assess our progress. Because foreign and domestic travel was involved to complete the interviews, we divided responsibilities and budgeted expenses. Photo research and permissions was another major task. Before we began writing we had a mutually-agreed plan of what we were each going to do and how we would get it done. We also set clear boundaries between our personal and writing lives.

Compatibility is Key

You and your co-author don’t have to think alike. In fact, it’s better if you don’t. Different perspectives challenge us and help sharpen the final product. Your experiences, tastes, and personalities can be highly divergent, but the key is compatibility working together.

If one writer is always productive and meets deadlines while the other is habitually late or blocked it’s a red flag. If one author is highly confident and the other insecure or prone to second-guessing it could become problematic, just as two highly-dominant personalities likely spell conflict. Take time to get to know the individual you are going to be working with as co-authors. No matter how brilliant their writing, make sure that your working styles and core personalities mesh well. Above all, if you respect one another, it will help a mutual writing project flourish. There will be hard choices and tough times in team-writing, and respect is what will get you through the contentious moments.

Put Your Agreement in Writing

Once you and your co-author decide to collaborate, make a contract. Whether you use Legal Zoom, share a lawyer, or each get your own, cover the key issues likely to arise. How will advances and royalties be divided? What will happen to ancillary rights, including story rights for film or television? In the event one co-author predeceases another, what happens to his or her rights? What about speaking fees? Does each author keep his or her own, or will the revenues be shared? What happens if the publisher rejects your work and demands repayment of any advances? How will you handle litigation if someone sues you over the book? If you have a falling out over the project, will you handle it through mediation or litigation?

Elizabeth and I didn’t have to worry about many of these issues because we have a straightforward marriage in which we share everything. But if you want to work with your spouse and keep your finances separate, you might want to consider these points and reach an agreement even if you don’t create a formal contract. Whoever you choose as a co-author, establish boundaries. If you work best at night and like to sleep late, let your co-author know you don’t want phone calls or texts before noon. If weekends are private or family time, make sure your co-author respects that.  

Rolling with the Punches

I value flexibility in a co-author. Just as a battle plan never survives the first contact with the enemy, in my experience no book gets published without lots of changes. With non-fiction, there’s the added complexity of how accessible and cooperative sources are and how easy it is to search archives. Highly-classified information was involved, complicating our task.

You get it. We made many adjustments to our initial plan for writing the book, some easy and others not so pain-free. It helped that we’d both worked in the highly-collaborative, pressure-filled world of writing for television. We knew how to press our individual point, but also how to concede. We’d learned not to reject an idea out of hand just because it was totally alien from our own viewpoint and truly disruptive. And we both embraced the mantra of our late agent, Mike Hamilburg, that “writing is re-writing.”

The low point came when our editor wanted us to cut 30,000 words from the final draft and add chapter sub-heads throughout the book. We spent a day venting about this to each other and relishing how surprised he’d be when we refused and took our masterpiece to another publisher. The next day, slightly calmer, we started to see where cuts might be made. Over the next few days we created a new, tighter structure for the book that actually looked like an improvement. With a more volatile co-author, it might have been the end of the book.

Today people still ask how we managed to write a book together and stay married. The same conflict-resolution skills that work in a marriage make co-authoring possible. We agreed to shelve some disagreements or unresolved problems until a better time to deal with it, but then set a date to handle it and stuck to it. We listened respectfully to each other’s views even when we didn’t initially agree. We applied the kind of rules used in writers’ workshops when it came to critiquing each other’s work. Professional courtesy is a good formula for working with any co-author.

There was only issue we couldn’t resolve. Although we shared equal credit on the book jacket, the Library of Congress catalogues co-authors alphabetically. Because E comes before J that made me the indented author! We still get a laugh out of that today.     


John B. Roberts II is a writer, television producer and artist living in Colorado Springs, Colorado. He was senior producer of the top-rated, Emmy-nominated weekly political television talk shows hosted by John McLaughlin, “The McLaughlin Group” and “John McLaughlin’s One on One.” He has written and produced thousands of television broadcasts.

He is the author of “Rating the First Ladies: The Women Who Influenced the Presidency,” (Citadel 2003) and co-author along with Elizabeth Roberts of “Freeing Tibet: 50 Years of Struggle, Resilience and Hope,” (AMACOM 2009). His most recent book is “Reagan’s Cowboys: Inside the 1984 Reelection Campaign’s Secret Operation Against Geraldine Ferraro” (McFarland 2020.) Story rights to “Reagan’s Cowboys” have been optioned by HBO. His articles have appeared in the New York Times, Washington Post, and Washington Times, Colorado Springs Gazette, and Colorado Springs Independent as well as George Magazine, Reader’s Digest, and The American Spectator, among others. He is a member of the Pikes Peak Writers, the Authors Guild, and Mystery Writers of America. https://www.jbrobertsauthor.com

Sweet Success for Doc Gurney

By: Darby Karchut

Congratulations to Dr. H.C. Gurney on the recent release of his book, THE ONE-EYED BUFFALO AND OTHER ADVENTUROUS STORIES FROM THE LIFE OF DOC GURNEY VETERINARIAN (December 2020 from Boulevard Press)

One Eyed Buffalo, By: Doc Gurney

ABOUT THE BOOK

The book has 32 engaging short stories which illustrate the unique challenges of a veterinarian treating animals across the plains and mountains of Colorado and Wyoming. Often far from his veterinary hospital, he had to rely on quick thinking and ingenuity to help his patients in emergency situations. His dedication to all animals resonates throughout the book. Both ebook and paperback may be purchase through Amazon.

ABOUT THE AUTHOR

Dr. H. C. Gurney has practiced veterinary medicine for over 50 years in both Wyoming and Colorado. In his lifetime he has been a veterinarian, a cowboy, a scientific researcher, an inventor, a politician, an author, and a lecturer (to name a few). On the leading edge of scientific discoveries, he has devoted his life to the well-being of all species. His philosophy is, “No problems, only solutions.”


Darby Karchut

Sweet Success is coordinated by Darby Karchut who is an award-winning author, dreamer, and compulsive dawn greeter. A proud native of New Mexico, she now lives in the foothills of the Rocky Mountains, where she runs in blizzards and bikes in lightning storms. Visit her website for information on her publications. Click here to submit your Sweet Success Story.

Coffee Shop Inspiration for Writers

By: Leeann Betts
Originally published in Nuggets of Writing Gold

Before the Pandemic

Before the pandemic, I’d sit in a coffee shop trying to figure out what to write. All around me were people sipping java or tea, munching bagels, meeting friends, talking on phones—and it hit me.

I was looking in at the goldfish bowl.

I really missed that over the past fifteen months or so. My goal is to get back to that coffee shop every Monday morning from ten until noon. Maybe have a friend or three drop in and chat. No masks. No social distancing. Let the ideas flow.

This would be a typical morning from pre-March 2020:

It’s only five past ten. I have my coffee, my asiago cheese bagel, and my laptop fired up. Already I eavesdropped on three friends who meet every two months to discuss a book, like a mini book club. While I couldn’t see the title of the one they are reading, it seemed to be full of witticisms, observations, and helpful insights. For example, one was about Solomon, the wisest man who ever lived. He married 1,000 women, which were his downfall. So if a man doesn’t marry 1,000 women, he’ll already be smarter than the wisest man who ever lived.

Later there was a table of older women gathering tables from near and far, even settling for round tables, to get enough seating for their group of about 20 women. Along comes one woman with a little girl, maybe about 4 or so. And I got to wondering if this older woman was the grandmother—or the mother. And plot ideas sprang forth immediately.

Today

A few days ago, at a table nearby, sat a middle eastern man and two women. Sometimes they spoke in English, sometimes in another language that sounded Arabic. Sometimes they mixed their sentences together, using English words in the middle of a sentence with this other language. For example, I heard the word ‘embassy’ and ‘must be careful’ in the midst of other words I couldn’t understand. Got me thinking about a suspense plot.

Every Monday when I am here, there is a woman sitting nearby who is a counselor of some kind. I’ve heard her talking to a client on the phone about an issue the client was going through. Not details, but I saw this counselor’s demeanor change from the way she looked when she was typing on her laptop—doing right-brain work—to the way her face softened and her posture relaxed as she talked to her client—left-brain work. She’d make a good character where I could show both sides of her at work.

Right now, there is a couple sitting next to me who are speaking Chinese, perhaps. I don’t understand a word they are saying, but they’ve been very animated at times, voices raised, hand gestures, smiles. Are they planning a business move? To buy a house? Get a cat? Have another child in contravention of China’s one-child law? What if one of the couple wants to return to China, but the other doesn’t? Will that impact their decision?

Sitting in a coffee shop may sound like a waste of time. Usually, I come here just to get away from the laundry or to meet fellow writers. But perhaps I need this unique stimulation to get the old grey cells, as Hercule Poirot would say, working.

Takeaway

Sometimes changing our surroundings gets us looking at characters differently.

Exercises

  1. Go to a coffee shop and eavesdrop on conversations around you. Can you use some of what you hear?
  2. Hang around a central bus depot or train station. Watch the people; make notes of what they do.
  3. Go to the airport and hang around the main concourse. Make up stories about the people you see.

Leeann Betts

Leeann Betts writes contemporary romantic suspense, while her real-life persona, Donna Schlachter, pens historical romantic suspense. Together she and Donna have published more than 30 novellas and full-length novels. They ghostwrite, judge writing contests, edit, facilitate a critique group, and are members of American Christian Fiction Writers, Writers on the Rock, Christian Authors Network, Pikes Peak Writers, and Sisters in Crime. Leeann travels extensively to research her stories, and is proud to be represented by Terrie Wolf of AKA Literary LLC. You can follow her on her blog, , and . Her books are available everywhere including Amazon and.